[identity profile] demonessryu.livejournal.com posting in [community profile] redpenwriters
New to the community and want to promote my original fic. Please give me feedback to improve it *bows*

The story revolves around people living in dream and nightmare, two things that at first glance appear to be the complete opposite of each other but truly are not. Two group of people are slowly approaching the thin line between dream and nightmare as family secrets could no longer be buried. When one no longer has home to return to, where should he go? Where does he belong?

Title: Darkness of the Day, Light of the Night
Rating: PG-13
Genre: drama, romance

http://www.webook.com/project/Darkness-of-the-Day-Light-of-the-Night

If you like it, please join the web and vote for me when the voting period has begun so that I may have a chance at being published.
 

Date: 2009-07-18 03:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amylan.livejournal.com
I like how this story is written, but it's very confusing to understand. It's very artistic, but it feels like there's not enough solid facts to understand what exactly had happened and what was happening, and I kept getting the characters mixed up, especially the "day" family. Maybe be a little more straightforward?

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